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mature warning because the first few paragraphs are a bit dark. nothing terrible, but someone suggested a trigger warning, so i slapped one on here.
so nervous uploading this fff
so i was crazy surprised when i started writing this. because... i wrote something. something not poetry. it's weird, writing prose. i feel so rusty, haha. please feel free to point out typos / awkward sentences / any other ridiculous mistakes. my transition from second person to first person seems a bit abrupt to me, so if you have any suggestions, i'd love to hear.
on another note: i know this is fairly unrealistic. i don't know anyone who would actually do this. i feel like the ending could be stronger, more exaggerated like the beginning of the piece - it feels anticlimactic to me. but it was an intriguing idea, and i figured i'd just follow it and see where it led. sorry for the lack of plot / general point. ):
but anyway! enjoy.
1,467 words.
i apologize for the obscene length and wordiness
so nervous uploading this fff
so i was crazy surprised when i started writing this. because... i wrote something. something not poetry. it's weird, writing prose. i feel so rusty, haha. please feel free to point out typos / awkward sentences / any other ridiculous mistakes. my transition from second person to first person seems a bit abrupt to me, so if you have any suggestions, i'd love to hear.
on another note: i know this is fairly unrealistic. i don't know anyone who would actually do this. i feel like the ending could be stronger, more exaggerated like the beginning of the piece - it feels anticlimactic to me. but it was an intriguing idea, and i figured i'd just follow it and see where it led. sorry for the lack of plot / general point. ):
but anyway! enjoy.
1,467 words.
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Very good. I especially like the part about being tempted to jump out a window, I can relate, I got a little confused though; did he break into someones house?